What do you think of my poem?

I...i'm in awe. That was amazing. It created such a clear picture for me that I felt as if I was in your place. Honestly, I think this is the best free verse i've seen. Hey, if you don't mind, could you criticize my poem "help with ideas to finish poem"? Im also trying free verse, but its my first time. With the likes of you, I think I could improve a lot.