Saturday, July 16, 2011

What do you think of the first page of my novel?

I think this is a bit overwhelming for an opening chapter if that makes any sense. The section where describing the other family members was a bit rough. I understand that while describing the family members you were proving a point that they all had been from wealthy countries but since there is no real character development at this point you may want to just mention briefly that they all had been lucky enough to avoid an assignment in an un wealthy country rather than mentioning each characters brief history. I think when several character names and descriptions are thrown at the reader in the initial few pages it can sometimes be hard to separate who is who, but I just might be slow lol. Sorry if that sounds to harsh, on the good side it wasnt bad enough for me to stop reading. I probly would have given it a few more pages to see where it went and then made my decision. Goodluck!!

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